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Writing Class: Informal Email/Letter

Task Type: Informal Email/Letter

Question
You have received the following email from your English penfriend:

I'm really pleased you're planning to come to England to study. Let me know what type of course you're interested in and I'll ring some colleges for details. The more information you can give me the better!

Write your email/letter of reply to your penfriend (around 140-190 words).

Makeover: Yanina

Read Yanina's answer to this question below. Try correcting the piece of writing yourself first: use the marking codes to think about what might be wrong (or what's good) about the piece of work. Then when you're ready, click the green buttons in the text for our feedback.

Dear July,

Thanks for your email and sorry for not replying sooner. Gd

You see, I've been planning this for a long time and I came WT to a WW conclusion: I want to take up singing classes in London!

What's cool is that I don't want to join a common class, but a group of people that expresses itself through the - music and lets its spirit free while singing. I'm really excited about this, and I'd love to have your opinion about it. It'd be fantastic if you could search for the appropriate singing classes in the city for me. Gd Just check the prices well and give me the schedule of each place. PE

I guess the best place to stay is in a house with a host family, but if you've got a better idea, let me know. I think I'll stay for two months, the problem is that I'm not sure if I can afford all the spends! WW That's one of the things of WW London that get WF on my nerves: everything is SO expensive!

Ok, I've got to go now, so... see you soon!

With love,

Yan

Feedback

Your email/letter has enough information (about the course, location, etc) for your friend to be able to help you. The informal register (which you achieve through the use of contracted forms, such as 'It'd', exclamation marks and a nice, chatty style) is just right for this type of email/letter. Your control of language is generally very good, with only a couple of minor errors. Good work!

 

Marking Code

/\ Word(s) missing

- Omit word

C Capitalization

Gd Good

O Organisation

P Punctuation

PE Poorly expressed

R Register/Formality

SS Sentence Structure

S Spelling

T Tip

WF Wrong form

WO Word order

WT Wrong tense

WW Wrong word

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