Check out students' answers to Flo-Joe's FCE Writing tasks with a teacher's feedback
You have been asked by the editor of your school magazine to write an article on the following topic:
"A load of old rubbish" or
"More choice than ever before"?
Is today's television still good value for money?
Write your article for the magazine (around 140-190 words).
Read Ahmet's answer to this question below. Try correcting the piece of writing yourself first: use the marking codes to think about what might be wrong (or what's good) about the piece of work. Then when you're ready, click the green buttons in the text for our feedback.
Worth seeing or just rubbish?In 1981 the first IBM PC was found and in the following years technology has been developing with such a speed that today we only need to press one button to send information all over the world. PE
But not everything shown on TV has an educational or informing value PE
I think there are so many other things to do to enjoy oneself that it is really not necessary to waste much time watching TV.
This is a nicely organised article with good control of language (both grammar and vocabulary). For this makeover I think you should change the first sentence and make the start of the article more relevant to the title. Apart from this and a couple of minor errors in the rest of the article, this is a good answer.
/\ Word(s) missing
- Omit word
PE Poorly expressed
SS Sentence Structure
WF Wrong form
WO Word order
WT Wrong tense
WW Wrong word