Check out students' answers to Flo-Joe's FCE Writing tasks with a teacher's feedback
Question
You have seen the following job advertisement on the noticeboard of your local language school:
CLUB ORGANISER NEEDED! (Monday and Wednesday evenings only) Our language school is looking for a person to help organise a Film Club for students of English. Our Film Club will meet twice a week to watch a film in English followed by a discussion of the film.
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Write your letter of application to the school owner (around 140-190 words).
Read Ana's answer to this question below. Try correcting the piece of writing yourself first: use the marking codes to think about what might be wrong (or what's good) about the piece of work. Then when you're ready, click the green buttons in the text for our feedback.
Dear Sir or Madam I am writing to you concerning the job advertisement, which I saw on the noticeboard of /\ local language school. There was told WW I think that I am a suitable person for this job. Gd That is all what I wanted to say. If you want R Yours Faithfully Ana Abesadze |
Ana, this is a good realisation of the task. You sound convincing to the reader and I am sure you would be offered an interview based on what you have written! I particularly liked your good control of grammatical tenses and the way you have organised the letter and used an appropriate beginning and ending.
I have corrected a couple of errors and made a single suggestion to show the examiner you have a broad range of vocabulary.
/\ Word(s) missing
- Omit word
C Capitalization
Gd Good
O Organisation
P Punctuation
PE Poorly expressed
R Register/Formality
SS Sentence Structure
S Spelling
T Tip
WF Wrong form
WO Word order
WT Wrong tense
WW Wrong word