Check out students' answers to Flo-Joe's FCE Writing tasks with a teacher's feedback
You have seen the following competition in an magazine for young people:
"In your experience what are the benefits and drawbacks of learning another language? Is is something you would recommend to ALL young people?"If we publish your article you will win a prize of fifty pounds!
Write your article for the magazine (around 140-190 words).
Read Gabriel's answer to this question below. Try correcting the piece of writing yourself first: use the marking codes to think about what might be wrong (or what's good) about the piece of work. Then when you're ready, click the green buttons in the text for our feedback.
Learning foreign languages is necessary nowadays because the world works like an international community and it is important to know how to communicate with each other. Gd
I come from Brazil and I speak portuguese C
First of all foreign languages can be very useful when you are abroad on holidays and when you need to speak with people from other nationalities. Secondly the Internet have WF
But not all is perfect. PE
I think it is very important to learn a different language because /\
This is a full answer to the question, Gabriel. You have outlined the advantages of learning another languiage as well as identifying potential difficulties. The reader would be fully informed.
You have written this in the style of an article and commincated your ideas clearly. It was an interesting article and the reader would be engaged throughout.
You have used paragraphs effectively with a clear introduction, two main body paragraphs looking at different issues and a final conclusion. I think the second paragraph could be worked into your conclusion perhaps as it doesn't really link with what comes before in the introduction or after. You use connecting phrases, such as 'first of all', 'what is more', etc. to link all the different points you make about the pros and cons of learning another language.
Your language control is good overall. I have highlighted some spelling mistakes (typing errors?) and rephrased certain phrases that didn't sound quite natural. Try to avoid the common error of missing out the 'it' when it's like a subject, e.g. '... it is very interesting...', and (finally) remember that languages have capital letters in English.
/\ Word(s) missing
- Omit word
PE Poorly expressed
SS Sentence Structure
WF Wrong form
WO Word order
WT Wrong tense
WW Wrong word