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Writing Class: Report


Task Type: Report

Question
Last year a new sport and leisure centre opened in your home town. You have recently received the following letter from the manager of the centre:

I am writing to all members of the Active Leisure Club to thank you for your custom over the last year. We want to make the facilities even better this year! Please send a short report to us, telling us what you think are the best and worst aspects of the club. We also want to hear your suggestions for new facilities...

Write your report to the manager of the club (between 140-190 words).

Makeover: Ling

Read Ling's answer to this question below. Try correcting the piece of writing yourself first: use the marking codes to think about what might be wrong (or what's good) about the piece of work. Then when you're ready, click the green buttons in the text for our feedback.

Introduction:

The aim of this report is to summarize the best and worst aspects of the club. Gd The report is based on the sample WW of my family members who have /\ using the club's facilities.

Best Aspects:

The variety WF facilities are convenient and cheap to use. The changing rooms of /\ swimming pool etc are very clean. The consummation of the café is inexpensive.PE The gym's equipment are WF good. The services of the staffs are PE fairly good.

Worst Aspects:

The facilities are not opened WF on Saturday and Sunday evenings, which we think that it - is really inconvenient. The badminton courts are not available. The only café is not enough using for the customers as there is no other restaurants. PE

Recommendations:

To conclude, the facilities are well-organized but there are some suggestions of WW us: extend the opening hours on weekend evenings. Install badminton courts as more and more people take up WT the sport. Install some restaurants for the addition of WF customers and some drinks machines may be necessary as well by the time of closures of the café or restaurants. PE

Feedback

This is a well-structured report, Ling, which covers all the necessary points. There are a number of occasions where your choice of expression isn't quite right so I have made a number of suggestions for you to study. This is a fairly good attempt at the task, nevertheless!

Marking Code

/\ Word(s) missing

- Omit word

C Capitalization

Gd Good

O Organisation

P Punctuation

PE Poorly expressed

R Register/Formality

SS Sentence Structure

S Spelling

T Tip

WF Wrong form

WO Word order

WT Wrong tense

WW Wrong word