See this sample Article from the Cambridge English First (FCE) Writing paper with feedback from a teacher

Writing Class: Article

Task Type: Article

Question
You have seen the following advertisement in a magazine:

Film Weekly Top 100 films - the viewers choice

What is your favourite film of all time?
Why should it be in the top 100?

Write a short article about these questions and you could be published in our next issue.

Write your article for Film Weekly magazine.

Makeover: Martina

Read Martina's answer to this question below. Try correcting the piece of writing yourself first: use the marking codes to think about what might be wrong (or what's good) about the piece of work. Then when you're ready, click the green buttons in the text for our feedback.

The Best Film

Which 100 films from millions PE which were created in latest WW years all around the world should be nominated to WW TOP FILMS?

A lot of films of average quality or with a poky WW plot were made during several last years PE. However, many briliant films were created too, but main part WW of them will stay unknown for most of us for WW their regional character.

The best film from that part of WW which have had publicity in many different countries from my point of view have to contain: the WW clever and simple plot, intelligent jokes and something that could impress spectators WW

Forrest Gump include WF all these ingredients. The main hero of /\ very naturalistic story loves life with all its unpredictable situations and his way of solving problems is charming. If I had a chance to recommend only one film to all people WW I would recommend them to see WF Forrest Gump with his "stupid" ideas and his unusual behaviour which can open /\ eyes of most people.

Feedback

This is a nice article, Martina. I like the way you slowly build up to telling the reader what film you have picked, and your enthusiasm for "Forrest Gump" shines through. There is a lot of vocabulary relating to film here, which is good.
Your main language problems seem to be to do with your word choice. I have suggested alternatives that could make your writing sound a bit more natural; at the same time, there is a good range of language in the second half of your essay.

Marking Code

/\ Word(s) missing

- Omit word

C Capitalization

Gd Good

O Organisation

P Punctuation

PE Poorly expressed

R Register/Formality

SS Sentence Structure

S Spelling

T Tip

WF Wrong form

WO Word order

WT Wrong tense

WW Wrong word

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