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You have seen the following advertisement in a magazine:
|Film Weekly Top 100 films - the viewers choice
Write your article for Film Weekly magazine.
Read Martina's answer to this question below. Try correcting the piece of writing yourself first: use the marking codes to think about what might be wrong (or what's good) about the piece of work. Then when you're ready, click the green buttons in the text for our feedback.
The Best Film
Which 100 films from millions PE
A lot of films of average quality or with a poky WW
The best film from that part of WW
Forrest Gump include WF
This is a nice article, Martina. I like the way you slowly build up to telling the reader what film you have picked, and your enthusiasm for "Forrest Gump" shines through. There is a lot of vocabulary relating to film here, which is good.
Your main language problems seem to be to do with your word choice. I have suggested alternatives that could make your writing sound a bit more natural; at the same time, there is a good range of language in the second half of your essay.
/\ Word(s) missing
- Omit word
PE Poorly expressed
SS Sentence Structure
WF Wrong form
WO Word order
WT Wrong tense
WW Wrong word