Check out students' answers to Flo-Joe's FCE Writing tasks with a teacher's feedback
Last year a new sport and leisure centre opened in your home town. You have recently received the following letter from the manager of the centre.
|I am writing to all members of the Active Leisure Club to thank you for your custom over the last year. We want to make the facilities even better this year! Please send a short report to us, telling us what you think are the best and worst aspects of the club. We also want to hear your suggestions for new facilities...|
Write your report to the manager of the club (around 140-190 words).
Read Veronica's answer to this question below. Try correcting the piece of writing yourself first: use the marking codes to think about what might be wrong (or what's good) about the piece of work. Then when you're ready, click the green buttons in the text for our feedback.
The aim of this report is to know about PE
The Active Leisure Club can offer different kinds of things to do; there are WF
I think the swimming-pool and the gym need to be changed in WW,
However, I enjoy having lunch or dinner in the three restaurants because they offer plenty of food and the price is not so expensive.
To sum up, I suggest keeping the swimming pool cleaner and buying new machines for the gym.Gd
This is a fair attempt at the report, Veronica. It needs padding out more in order to reach the minimum word limit, so you could have added a bit extra if you wished. The layout is right for a report and, although a little brief, you manage to cover the relevant points (i.e. the facilities, your opinion and suggestions for improvement). In order to show you appreciate the difference between a report and other tasks in the FCE exam, I would suggest using headings where I've indicated. The language is generally sound, particularly your grammatical control.
/\ Word(s) missing
- Omit word
PE Poorly expressed
SS Sentence Structure
WF Wrong form
WO Word order
WT Wrong tense
WW Wrong word