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Cambridge English: First

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Writing Class: Formal Letter

Task Type: Letter of Application

You have seen the following job advertisement:

  • Would you like to work with children aged 5-11?
  • Do you have lots of energy?
  • Are you an excellent swimmer?
Our Children's Club is looking for someone to teach a group of ten children swimming and to do a range of other activities. Please apply to Mrs Sykes saying why you are suitable for the job.

Write your letter of application to Mrs Sykes (around 140-190 words).

Makeover: Mee

Read Mee's answer to this question below. Try correcting the piece of writing yourself first: use the marking codes to think about what might be wrong (or what's good) about the piece of work. Then when you're ready, click the green buttons in the text for our feedback.

Dear Sir, WW

I`m writing to apply for the job of club organiser, which was advertised on the notice board in the school. Gd

I used to run a club /\ in my old school in England which made me think I have the ability to organise the club. T/PE Also - I have been studying English for a few years, P I got a merit in the PET and I`m going to take the FCE exam next year and IGCSE in 2002.

I'm also a fan of English and American films and go to the cinema quite often.

I'm also T/WW an outgoing person and have the ability to control a discussion which will prove helpful in the club. O

If you think I`m the WW suitable person to organise your film club then I would like WW to hear from you.

Yours Faithfully C

Mee Sarasas


This is a good letter of application for the post of club organiser. There is sufficient information in the letter for the reader to judge your application. A little more detail (as I highlighted) would have given Mrs Sykes more to make a decision on and increased the word length. Your grammatical control is very good and your vocabulary is mostly varied (apart from your over-use of 'also'!) I have corrected a couple of minor points but this is generally a pleasing answer.


Marking Code

/\ Word(s) missing

- Omit word

C Capitalization

Gd Good

O Organisation

P Punctuation

PE Poorly expressed

R Register/Formality

SS Sentence Structure

S Spelling

T Tip

WF Wrong form

WO Word order

WT Wrong tense

WW Wrong word