Check out students' answers to Flo-Joe's FCE Writing tasks with a teacher's feedback
You recently attended an English language course. At the end of the course you were given the following letter:
|We hope you have enjoyed studying with us. In order to plan future courses we would be grateful if you could write a short report giving us your views of the course. If you have any suggestions we would also like to hear them.
Thanks in advance.
Write your report for the Principal (around 140-190 words).
Read Pablo's answer to this question below. Try correcting the piece of writing yourself first: use the marking codes to think about what might be wrong (or what's good) about the piece of work. Then when you're ready, click the green buttons in the text for our feedback.
This report is intended to evaluate the success of the six months WF
LOW AREAS WW
First of all, as there were twenty of us in the class, we were a bit crowded, and also the computer room was not big enough for all of us. Another thing to mention as a drawback Gd
As I had expected, /\
To sum up, my only suggestion would be reducing the WW
This is a very well-written answer to the task, Pablo. I like the way you have organised this report and given each paragraph its own heading. This really helps the reader, doesn't it? You have a good range of grammatical structures and you're ambitious in the vocabulary you use. Another positive aspect is your use of linking phrases ('Another thing to mention...', 'As a consequence...', 'To sum up....') which helps your writing to flow nicely. For the makeover, I have commented on aspects of your English that wouldn't be considered too serious at FCE-level but are points you may wish to remember for the future!
/\ Word(s) missing
- Omit word
PE Poorly expressed
SS Sentence Structure
WF Wrong form
WO Word order
WT Wrong tense
WW Wrong word