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You have received the following email from your English-speaking friend.
|.............Thanks for inviting me to stay with you when I visit your country next month. I'm not sure how to get to your apartment from the airport. Could you write back giving me some basic instructions? What would be the best method of transport for me? I'd prefer one that isn't too expensive! Just one other thing - what will the weather be like when I get there? (Just so I'll know what clothes to pack!) .........|
Write your informal email/letter of reply to your friend (around 140-190 words).
Read Aysen's answer to this question below. Try correcting the piece of writing yourself first: use the marking codes to think about what might be wrong (or what's good) about the piece of work. Then when you're ready, click the green buttons in the text for our feedback.
|Hie S Jenny,
And finally the money problem PE
As I said before I am looking forward to see WF you.
A good attempt. You have answered the question appropriately, explained how to get to your apartment, mentioned the weather and suggested what clothing to bring. A full answer.
You have written the email in a friendly tone using a question and exclamations ('OK?', 'remember that!') to engage the reader. You could consider using contractions such as 'I'm' instead of 'I am', or 'I'll' instead of 'I will' as this helps to create a more informal style. The reader would be fully informed.
The article is clearly organised with clear paragraphs. Good use of discourse markers such as 'it' and 'there' to refer to earlier nouns and one or two well-chosen linking words. Note my alternatives regarding your use of 'about' to introduce another point.
In general a well-written email which is clear and easy to follow. Note my suggestions for some alternative words and expressions for you to consider.
/\ Word(s) missing
- Omit word
PE Poorly expressed
SS Sentence Structure
WF Wrong form
WO Word order
WT Wrong tense
WW Wrong word