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This is part of an email you have received from an English-speaking friend, who will be visiting your home town for a short stay:
|What a pity you won't be around when we arrive. Anyway, we'll only be there for one day and I was wondering whether you could recommend a couple of local restaurants. Something that caters for families would be great ... we eat anything!|
Write the email to your friend recommending two local restaurants. (Between 220-260 words)
Read Joy's answer to this question below. Try correcting the piece of writing yourself first: use the marking codes to think about what might be wrong (or what's good) about the piece of work. Then when you're ready, click the green buttons in the text for our feedback.
Great to hear from you! I’m so sorry I won’t be able to be around when you arrive. I really have to go to that compulsory further training I told you about. I wish I could see you and your gorgeous little family. But I’m sure you guys will have a great time here in Chur! So, which restaurant should I recommend you -
I would probably go for the 'Sommerau'. Just been there last week. WT
The other great tipp S
Well, I hope you do like one of those and wish you an enjoyable day! Give my love to your family! Gd
Speak to you soon,
The task was completed fully and appropriately. You have recommended two restauants and given a clear outline of what each is like, including how well they cater for children.
Ideas are communicated clearly and the email is written in a very authentic style, using an informal, chatty register throughout. This is achieved by missing words out 'Great to hear from you', use of exclamations, and some nicely chosen vocabulary.
The email is very well organised. Paragraphs are clear and cohesive devices are used effectively.
An very good range of everyday and more advanced vocabulary is used. A very good range of simple and more advanced grammatical forms are used. Errors are present but do not impede communication. There are some lovely choices of informal vocabulary such as
/\ Word(s) missing
- Omit word
PE Poorly expressed
SS Sentence Structure
T Tip (Not wrong but a suggestion)
WF Wrong form
WO Word order
WT Wrong tense
WW Wrong word