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Question
You have been asked to write a report for the World Information Organisation on the following topic:
What are the greatest threats to the environment in your country today? What are the solutions? |
Write your report. (Around 220-260 words)
Read Katja's answer to this question below. Try correcting the piece of writing yourself first: use the marking codes to think about what might be wrong (or what's good) about the piece of work. Then when you're ready, click the green buttons in the text for our feedback.
This is a report hold on WW
The three most important threats to the environment in Germany PE The population has to behave more sensible WF Pollution in general, emphasising on pollution of surroundings, PE |
This report discusses three main threats to the environment and some proposals to solve these problems. In other words, the points made are entirely relevant to the question.
The main language errors are to do with vocabulary choice, so I have made some alternative suggestions, which sound more natural.
/\ Word(s) missing
- Omit word
C Capitalization
Gd Good
O Organisation
P Punctuation
PE Poorly expressed
R Register/Formality
SS Sentence Structure
S Spelling
T Tip (Not wrong but a suggestion)
WF Wrong form
WO Word order
WT Wrong tense
WW Wrong word