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You are a member of a committee that is campaigning for an international sports competition to be hosted in your home town. You have received the following memo:
|To: Committee members
I would be grateful if all members could write a short proposal giving their views on the following points:
Write your proposal for the Chairman of the committee. (220-260 words)
Read Martina's answer to this question below. Try correcting the piece of writing yourself first: use the marking codes to think about what might be wrong (or what's good) about the piece of work. Then when you're ready, click the green buttons in the text for our feedback.
INTERNATIONAL SOCCER COMPETITION IN LIBOCHOVICE
The aim of this proposal is to show a view of holding PE
Libochovice has a brand new soccer field with 5000 seats. Sport events could also be spread to the nearby villages as they are not far (usually within 5 km), they are in good condition and they will be available for this event as /\
The town is reachable by busses and trains. WF
There are plenty of restaurants, pubs, a cinema and a leisure centre which offers plenty to do in the evenings. There will be a fun fair taking place in WW
There are not many places offering accommodation in the town. So there would be a free shuttle available from the closest surrounding lodging places. Gd
The city council is able to organise such a challenging competition, as there have been WW
To sum up Libochovice as it appears could manage such an event due to a good organisation and if they stick up to their planning. Gd/PE
Martina, this proposal is very clearly organised, appropriately laid out and all the points you make are valid. It would therefore score highly on task achievement.
There are some language errors but I suspect some of these are simply slips of the key and not down to a lack of knowledge (e.g. passive verb forms - be drawN up, will be spenT). It's really important to proofread your work in the exam, simply so you don't lose marks unnecessarily.
Overall, this is a good answer!
/\ Word(s) missing
- Omit word
PE Poorly expressed
SS Sentence Structure
T Tip (Not wrong but a suggestion)
WF Wrong form
WO Word order
WT Wrong tense
WW Wrong word