Check out students' answers to Flo-Joe's CAE Writing tasks with a teacher's feedback
You have seen the following announcement in your local arts magazine:
|PERFORMANCE OF THE YEAR
What has been the best performance of the year in your local area? It could be a concert or a stage play, or perhaps an art or craft exhibition. You can make your nomination by sending us a review of what you have seen, telling us why you think it was the most outstanding performance of the year...
Write your review for the magazine editor. (220-260 words)
Read Jiyeon Choi's answer to this question below. Try correcting the piece of writing yourself first: use the marking codes to think about what might be wrong (or what's good) about the piece of work. Then when you're ready, click the green buttons in the text for our feedback.
At the last moment of this year, I recall my memory of those performances of the year. It is surprising that there were numbers of WF
The title of the exhibition was 'Local Amateur artist'. As the title is, WW
I liked the atmosphere of the exhibition that was close to public, PE
I found out they were various PE
They were imaginative or rather creative without any -
Although the exhibition hadn't been WW
This was an interesting review of an arts and crafts exhibition. You clearly state the theme of the exhibition - good - and give a number of reasons why you enjoyed it.
In terms of organisation you could group some of these shorter paragraphs to make longer ones. Your language accuracy is quite good, but on occasions your expression is a bit vague and I wasn't always sure what you meant, so forgive me if I 'got it wrong' with my suggestions!
/\ Word(s) missing
- Omit word
PE Poorly expressed
SS Sentence Structure
T Tip (Not wrong but a suggestion)
WF Wrong form
WO Word order
WT Wrong tense
WW Wrong word