Check out students' answers to Flo-Joe's CAE Writing tasks with a teacher's feedback
Read this extract from a letter you have recently sent to a friend:
|.... Oh, and by the way, don't go to Barry's Restaurant for your birthday. We went there last night - the service was awful and the food was a disaster! I complained to the head waiter but he asked me to put it in writing ...|
Write your letter of complaint to the restaurant manager. (220-260 words)
Read Katarina's answer to this question below. Try correcting the piece of writing yourself first: use the marking codes to think about what might be wrong (or what's good) about the piece of work. Then when you're ready, click the green buttons in the text for our feedback.
I am writing to complain about the efficiency of the service that you offer in your restaurant, which is, in fact, one of the most recommended places to go in our town.
Being influenced by your PE
Being ordinary customers, we did not have enough time to eat our dinner, because we were told to leave our table for another, probably more important, customer. This unbelievable explanation was given by your service manager and we had no alternative, P
Regarding the food offered on your menu, I have never seen the French Chicken so badly prepared. The French rice appeared to be of the same quality, absolutely tasteless and without any trace of spice. The waiter brought me the bottle of two-year Chablis instead of bringing the WW
In addition to the unimaginative WW
According to my negative experience, which I have mentioned in this letter, I would be thankful to receive the WW
Your letter of complaint successfully completes all of the task. (The reader would have a very clear understanding of why you were dissatified with the meal and a clear expectation of the action that you expect to be taken.)
You have organised this letter very well indeed and you achieve the appropriate register through your use of complex grammatical structures. The tone of the letter is a little sharp, but then again you have reason to be annoyed!
I have reworded some of your expressions on occasions where your vocabulary doesn't sound entirely natural, but even as this letter stands you have approached the task competently. Good!
/\ Word(s) missing
- Omit word
PE Poorly expressed
SS Sentence Structure
T Tip (Not wrong but a suggestion)
WF Wrong form
WO Word order
WT Wrong tense
WW Wrong word