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A tourist company which organises coach tours of your home town has placed the following advertisement in your local newspaper:
|TOUR GUIDES REQUIRED
Are you an outgoing and sociable person, who has a good command of English and some knowledge of local history?
Take-a-Tour is setting up a branch in your area and we are looking for tour guides to accompany up to fifty passengers a time on our coach tours. Your duties will include welcoming passengers aboard the coach, giving a commentary about the local sights, and taking small groups around the town on foot.
Write the letter of application
Read Sato's answer to this question below. Try correcting the piece of writing yourself first: use the marking codes to think about what might be wrong (or what's good) about the piece of work. Then when you're ready, click the green buttons in the text for our feedback.
I am writing to reply to your advertisement for the WW
I am always interested in WT
I have been living in this town since I was born. My ancestors came to live here two hundred years ago thus I know how this town has developed. I think I will manage to give a unique speech to the tourists. Gd
I passed the Cambridge Certificate in Advanced English last year, which I believe endorses my English ability. As far as I am concerned, this level is suitable for a tour guide.
I am available to start work on 15th February. I am also available to attend an interview in the afternoon on Monday to Thursday. Please do not hesitate to contact me if you need any further information. Gd
I would be very grateful if you consider my application. I look forward to hearing from you soon. Please do not hesitate to contact me if you need any further information. Gd
This is good letter of application, Sato. The layout and organisation are appropriate, and the letter contains information about yourself that is tailored to the reader and the task. (I'm sure that the employer would consider you as a possible candidate for the job based on what you have written.)
In terms of language, you are successful in adopting a suitably formal register. On a couple of occasions you have chosen the wrong verb tense, and there are also some spelling (typing?) errors. Make sure you take the opportunity of proofreading your work so that you don't lose marks unnecessarily. Overall, however, this is a competent answer to the task. Well done.
/\ Word(s) missing
- Omit word
PE Poorly expressed
SS Sentence Structure
T Tip (Not wrong but a suggestion)
WF Wrong form
WO Word order
WT Wrong tense
WW Wrong word