Check out students' answers to Flo-Joe's CPE Writing tasks with a teacher's feedback
You are looking through the alumni newsletter of a school that you once attended and you see the following announcement:
|What are your best and worst school memories? Write in and tell us and we will publish the most interesting articles in our next newsletter.|
Write the article for the editor of the alumni newsletter. (around 280 - 320 words)
Read Talita's answer to this question below. Try correcting the piece of writing yourself first: use the marking codes to think about what might be wrong (or what's good) about the piece of work. Then when you're ready, click the green buttons in the text for our feedback.
The improbable happened twice
When it comes to school years it is hard to point out only one or two memories. There are so many to choose; those were times of joy, fun and lots of adventures. I am going to tell you about my best and worst school memories.
Let us travel back to 1990 Gd
My worst memory took place in my last high school year during preparation for the CEE (college entrance exam). We were having the external games and were hosting Salesiano students from Recife. It was Saturday morning, when the boring English lesson was taking place that was happening the great handball final us against recife. PE
Well, I had to struggle with chemistry a little bit but it was worth the game PE
An interesting account of some happy, and not so happy, times at school. You addressed the main points in the question and organised the article into appropriate paragraphs. You also managed to express the importance that these events had for you at the time. There are a number of errors that should be avoided at this level. You should try to read through your work to check for clarity and correct sentence structure. Finally, try to keep to the word limit as this is significantly longer than the 300-350 word limit. Thanks for sharing these memories with us!
/\ Word(s) missing
- Omit word
PE Poorly expressed
SS Sentence Structure
WF Wrong form
WO Word order
WT Wrong tense
WW Wrong word