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Writing Class: Article

Task Type: Article

Question
You have been asked by the editor of your school magazine to write an article on the following topic:

Today's television

"A load of old rubbish" or
"More choice than ever before"?

Is today's television still good value for money?

Write your article for the magazine (around 140-190 words).

Makeover: Ahmet

Read Ahmet's answer to this question below. Try correcting the piece of writing yourself first: use the marking codes to think about what might be wrong (or what's good) about the piece of work. Then when you're ready, click the green buttons in the text for our feedback.

Worth seeing or just rubbish?

In 1981 the first IBM PC was found and in the following years technology has been developing with such a speed that today we only need to press one button to send information all over the world. PE There is a big WW number of TV channels providing us with information of all sorts, like documentaries, news, scientific programmes etc.

But not everything shown on TV has an educational or informing value PE . In fact, the chance of finding something really interesting when you switch on the box is slim. Gd The most PE programmes are boring because they are repeats of soap operas you did not want to see the first time they were shown or films you have already seen a dozen times or just stupid competition programmes.

I think there are so many other things to do to enjoy oneself that it is really not necessary to waste much time watching TV.

Feedback

This is a nicely organised article with good control of language (both grammar and vocabulary). For this makeover I think you should change the first sentence and make the start of the article more relevant to the title. Apart from this and a couple of minor errors in the rest of the article, this is a good answer.

 

Marking Code

/\ Word(s) missing

- Omit word

C Capitalization

Gd Good

O Organisation

P Punctuation

PE Poorly expressed

R Register/Formality

SS Sentence Structure

S Spelling

T Tip

WF Wrong form

WO Word order

WT Wrong tense

WW Wrong word

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