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Writing Paper: Part 2
Task type: Report

Question
Last year a new sport and leisure centre opened in your home town. You have recently received the following letter from the manager of the centre.

 

I am writing to all members of the Active Leisure Club to thank you for your custom over the last year. We want to make the facilities even better this year! Please send a short report to us, telling us what you think are the best and worst aspects of the club. We also want to hear your suggestions for new facilities...

Write your report to the manager of the club (around 120-180 words).

Answer
Click on the underlined words or phrases for comments. The numbers in brackets offer suggestions. General feedback appears below the essay.
Name: Veronica
School: Embassy Cambridge, UK

The aim of this report is to know about {1} the Club's facilities and, if it is possible, try to improve these facilities {***} {2}giving some useful suggestions.{3}

The Active Leisure Club can offer different kinds of things to do; there are a swimming pool, a gym, some tennis fields, three restaurants and a disco-pub.{4}

I think the swimming-pool and the gym need to be changed in sometings {5}, because they are quite old. {***} {6}The swimming pool is often pretty dirty and crowded.

However, I enjoy having lunch or dinner in the three restaurants because they offer plenty of food and the price is not so expensive.

To sum up, I suggest keeping the swimming pool cleaner and buying new machines for the gym.

Feedback

This is a fair attempt at the report, Veronica. It is (just!) within the word limit of 120 -180 words, so you could have added a bit extra to the report if you wished. The layout is right for a report and, although a little brief, you manage to cover the relevant points (i.e. the facilities, your opinion and suggestions for improvement).
The language is generally sound, particularly your grammatical control.

Good luck in the exam!
Fiona Joseph
8.5.01


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