Writing
Paper: Part 2
Task
type: Article
Question
You
have seen the following announcement in an international magazine for
16-25 year olds:
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'Young
people are spending more time each day on their computers than watching
television. Is this a change for the better?'
We are interested in your views on this topic. You
can contribute to the debate by sending us a short article with
your opinion.
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Write your
article for the magazine
(around 120-180 words).
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Name: Irina
Before addressing the
question of what is better for young people, I would like to remind
{***}
{1}that
both activities (spending time on a computer and watching television)
are harmful for children's/teen's{2}
health. {***}
At
the other side {3}
it's impossible to imagine our life without computers and television.
With the help of computers
young people can meet new friends, find out a lot of information,
{***}
{4}
take part in forums and discussions. Surfing the Internet needs
imagination, logical thinking and knowledge. Young people are able
to choose what they want to watch/read/listen to, and the choice
is practically unlimited.
Television can't give
such an opportunity.
Precisely
here is found the crux of the problem{5}. There are plenty
of free sites with
content far from morality{6}; many computer games impose
cruelty. And
the idea that, spending time in Internet's chats young people develop
their social skills, is problematic{7}. I
wish it would be so!{8} But getting used to the Internet's
rules of comunication, they might find it difficult to face up to
reality, {***}
{9}make
friends in the real world.
For my part, I spend
a lot of time on my computer (learning English and working). But
when I want to relax I'd rather watch TV with my friends than loiter
away {10}
time sitting alone in front of the computer!
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Feedback
This is a really interesting essay, Irina. I enjoyed reading your
views on the internet and the effect it is having on young people.
You are ambitious in your choice of vocabulary and grammatical structures,
which is very good for an examiner to see at this level (FCE). Just
occasionally, your expression misses the mark but the changes I
have made are relatively minor. Be careful not to miss out the final
'and' when you are listing points.
Thanks for sending it in and good luck if you are doing the exam
in March or June.
Fiona Joseph
14.2.01
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Vakho Jandieri
English Language Study Centre, Tbilisi, Georgia
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Computers play an important role in people's
everyday life. It enables them to find appropriate information
in detail in a few minutes, complete their work effectively
and accurately and even make new friends using Internet.
On the other hand, TV that is also a source of the information,
doesn't give people the best opportunity to gain high knowledge
about specific issues to satisfy their interests and demands.
However, both computers and TV have many disadvantages for a
variety of reasons. The main problem, the humanity faces nowadays,
is a radiation. This drawback might also outweigh the plus points
of computer and TV. From my point of view, despite the disadvantage
mentioned above, it is understandable and acceptable that people
all over the world in such a competitive society prefer spending
more time each day on their computers than watching TV. I think
it's more effective method to cope with the problems related
to the work and overcome many other difficulties.
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