Check out students' answers to Flo-Joe's CAE Writing tasks with a teacher's feedback
You have been asked to write a report for the World Information Organisation on the following topic:
|What are the greatest threats to the environment in your country today?
What are the solutions?
Write your report. (220-260 words)
Read Asia's answer to this question below. Try correcting the piece of writing yourself first: use the marking codes to think about what might be wrong (or what's good) about the piece of work. Then when you're ready, click the green buttons in the text for our feedback.
Threats to the environment in Poland
The aim of this report is to describe the greatest dangers for the natural environment in Poland.
One of the biggest sources of water pollution are fertilisers. Most of it with rain water floats from fields into rivers and further on into the Baltic Sea. Fertilisers are causing the overgrow WF
A solution to this problem could be the reduction of field manure and better agricultural education for farmers.
Slask is a region of Poland of WF
The solution, which is the installation of filters reducing the emission of harmful substances into /\
These are only /\
This was getting to be a really interesting essay when it suddenly finished! You are about 30 words short of the word limit of 250 words you should be aiming for, so you have room to add a couple of sentences to round this off. I would have liked to know more about the role the government AND individuals could play in solving environmental problems.
In terms of language, you are successful in achieving a formal, academic style that is just right for this type of writing task. You are also well-informed on the topic, which is why I was enjoying it so much! The layout and organisation are also appropriate.
All in all, this was interesting to read. Just remember in the exam to make the most of the number of words you're allowed to write.
/\ Word(s) missing
- Omit word
PE Poorly expressed
SS Sentence Structure
T Tip (Not wrong but a suggestion)
WF Wrong form
WO Word order
WT Wrong tense
WW Wrong word