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Writing Paper: Part 2
Task type: Informal letter

Question
You have received the following email from your English penfriend.

 

>It's a really brave step to take a year out of >college to come and spend 6 months in the >UK! What are you planning to do with your >time? Find a job? Learn some new skills? >Write back and give me more details of your >plans so I can do my best to help you have a >good time...

Write your letter of reply to your penfriend (around 120-180 words).



Answer

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Name: Olimpia

Dear Mary,

I was very happy to hear from you. I thank you very much for helping me with all these arrangements. {1}

First of all, my intention is to study, to improve my English. You know that I really want to become a English teacher. {***} {2}

As a part of my practise {3} I think it will be fantastic to stay in a host family to share the eating habits and customs.

Although I am prepared to pay all the expenses with{4} the course and host family, it will be valuable if I can work as a baby-sitter, to earn extra money to use in {5} additional expenses and travelling in my free time. {***} {6}I would love to visit touristic {7} places in {8}UK.

I would appreciate {***} {9} if you could send me some information about the courses available starting in January or websites that{10} I can search for this information.

I look forward to seeing you soon. Thank you in advance for your help.

Best wishes,

Olimpia



Feedback

This is a really nice answer, Olimpia! Your letter is well organised and it is clear what your plans are so your friend will be able to help you.

I like the way that you have achieved a polite tone in this letter and the language errors that occur are fairly minor. Well done!

I hope you pass the FCE.

Best wishes
Fiona Joseph
5.2.02

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Violeta Gutkowski
School: Colegio Nacional de Bs As

Dear Susan,

I'm writing in reply to the e-mail you sent to me. Thank you for offering your help.

My plans for my six-month trip consist in the following. First, I think is a good idea to travel one month around England. The following month I thought of working at a restaurant in the place I liked best. The next three months I was planning to have a paid work. And the last month, I'm not sure yet where I would like to work. It depends on the choices I get.

I was wondering if you wouldn't mind to send me some brochures form some cheap hotels where I could stay and of the best places to visit in England. I know it's a lot to ask, but could you look in the local paper for companies which are looking for part-time staff please?

I really appreciate your help and I'm looking forward to your reply.

Best wishes,

Violeta Gutkowski


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Bunty Hong
School: Regent College

Hi Friend,

I've received your letter, I feel extremely excited that I will be able to spend 6 month experiencing myself in The United King with you. I've recently planned of what I am going to do when I get there, and I was wondering if you wouldn't mind helping me something.

When I get there, I want to do a volunteer work for about two months before doing part-time work, and then I will spend a whole month traveling at the end of my stay. In the mean time, I would like to if you know if you could send me a list of charities that are looking for volunteers, especially working with children. I know it's a lot to ask you, but could you look in the local newspaper to see which company wants part-time staff as well? And could you advise me how to write a CV in English? If I could trouble you for one more favor I would like you to send me tourist information brochures or a list of useful websites on the best tourists' attractions. I know that's a lot for you to do, however, I know you will help me with the above problems.

I'm looking forward to hearing from you, thanks in advance my good friend.

Yours sincerely

bunty hong


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