Check out students' answers to Flo-Joe's CAE Writing tasks with a teacher's feedback
You have recently read the following magazine article:
|Is it the end of the printed book as we know it?
According to internet experts, the book is dead. What they are predicting is that by 2020 90% of everything we read will be in electronic form. So the form of the book that has been around for 1300 years will become extinct...
Write a letter to the editor of 'Future Net' giving your views (220-260 words).
Read Olatz's answer to this question below. Try correcting the piece of writing yourself first: use the marking codes to think about what might be wrong (or what's good) about the piece of work. Then when you're ready, click the green buttons in the text for our feedback.
I am really interested in the article you wrote last week about /\
From my point of view in the last ten years computers have become such an important power that humans can neither WW
Reading books has not only been an excellent entertainment and pleasure for lots of people during WW
If books dissappeared we would have computers in all schools instead /\
Although there is not much to do to deal with the problem of books death, WO
I look forward you to taking my advivise into account as you are an important person and you have a PE
This is a good attempt to discuss some of the issues in the question. You have written just over 200 words, so you have scope the develop the question (of whether or not the printed book has a future) a little more, by considering the advantages and disadvantages of reading books in electronic format.
The layout and organisation of the letter is appropriate.
In terms of language I'd advise you to concentrate on spelling, although your grammatical control is very good.
/\ Word(s) missing
- Omit word
PE Poorly expressed
SS Sentence Structure
T Tip (Not wrong but a suggestion)
WF Wrong form
WO Word order
WT Wrong tense
WW Wrong word