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Cambridge English: Advanced

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Writing Class: Letter to an Editor


Task Type: Letter to an Editor

Question
You have recently read the following magazine article:

Is it the end of the printed book as we know it?
According to internet experts, the book is dead. What they are predicting is that by 2020 90% of everything we read will be in electronic form. So the form of the book that has been around for 1300 years will become extinct...

Write a letter to the editor of 'Future Net' giving your views (220-260 words).

Makeover: Olatz

Read Olatz's answer to this question below. Try correcting the piece of writing yourself first: use the marking codes to think about what might be wrong (or what's good) about the piece of work. Then when you're ready, click the green buttons in the text for our feedback.

Dear Sir

I am really interested in the article you wrote last week about /\ death of printed books with the appearance of new technologies such as /\ internet.

From my point of view in the last ten years computers have become such an important power that humans can neither WW control them, SS indeed, machines are becoming more powerful than human's minds and this might set off a dissater in this world.

Reading books has not only been an excellent entertainment and pleasure for lots of people during WW years and years but it has been our bigger educative WF instrument since we have had to learn history, geography and biology, for instance reading our school notebooks.

If books dissappeared we would have computers in all schools instead /\ the traditional books, that WW would be slightly more comfortable WW since we would have all the information in WW internet.

Although there is not much to do to deal with the problem of books death, WO I encourage everybody to sort out to - this problem and to go on reading books in order not to make them disappear.

I look forward you to taking my advivise into account as you are an important person and you have a PE

Yours faithfully

OLATZ

Feedback

This is a good attempt to discuss some of the issues in the question. You have written just over 200 words, so you have scope the develop the question (of whether or not the printed book has a future) a little more, by considering the advantages and disadvantages of reading books in electronic format.
The layout and organisation of the letter is appropriate.
In terms of language I'd advise you to concentrate on spelling, although your grammatical control is very good.

 

Marking Code

/\ Word(s) missing

- Omit word

C Capitalization

Gd Good

O Organisation

P Punctuation

PE Poorly expressed

R Register/Formality

SS Sentence Structure

S Spelling

T Tip (Not wrong but a suggestion)

WF Wrong form

WO Word order

WT Wrong tense

WW Wrong word