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Question
You have been asked to write a report for the World Information Organisation on the following topic:

What are the greatest threats to the environment in your country today?

What are the solutions?


Write your report. (about 250 words)


Answer

Click on the underlined words or phrases for comments. The numbers in brackets offer suggestions. General feedback appears below the essay.

Name: Katja Schuengel

School: University of Wolverhampton

This is a report hold on {1} the three greatest threats to the environment in Germany and some suggested solutions to the problems.

The three most important threats to the environment in Germany {2} are recycling of waste, especially waste of households {3}, pollution in general and the abuse {4} of fertilisers, especially by farmers. Recycling of waste in households remains still a problem due to people's negligence towards collecting their waste. Old papers and sheets should be collected separately as well as rests of food, which can be stored in the garden, and plastic boxes, such as yoghurt pots, and empty bottles. {5}

The population has to behave more sensible {6} and the government should demand to collect waste with commencing an environmental campaign. {7}

Pollution in general, emphasising on pollution of surroundings {8}, is a problem in Germany too. A lot of people throw their waste, such as tissues, on the street - just where they are walking - instead of putting their rubbish in a bin. But a worse point is to leave their used stuff {9} in the forest or park when people are going for a walk. A solution of pollution prevention{10} is to provide more litter boxes.

The last threat is the abuse{11} of fertilisers in farming because the population's health can be dangerously affected after having eaten the food. More and more farmers use fertilisers to augment their crop.

The chemical ingredients of fertilisers are supposed to protect the harvest against insects, which reduce the crop. The population of Germany should protest against the abuse of fertilisers and boycott the farmer's food. The government has to support the croppers to use more biological methods.{12}


Feedback

This report discusses three main threats to the environment and some proposals to solve these problems. In other words, the points made are entirely relevant to the question.

The main language errors are to do with vocabulary choice, so I have made some alternative suggestions, which sound more natural.

Fiona Joseph
24.10.00

P.S. Congratulations to Katja, who passed the CAE exam in June!

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Other Answers

Fahad O. Al-Taffaq , Embassy CES Newnham, Cambridge, England

I have been asked to write a report about the serious threats to the environment in my country. In fact, recent researches proved that there are various types of monements that affects the environment in a negative way, therefore something should be done to stop this problem from becoming a real threat to the wild-life and the marine life.

Firstly, oil has become a source of pullotion either to the marine-life or even to the wild-life. In one sense, Oil tankers passing by our coast dump their waste in the Gulf water with out any care to the rules set by the government. Bearing in mind that such carelesness could lead to destry the sea-life and spoil the sea bed which is an extreme lose. In the other sense, there should be some guard teams which are supposed to monitor these tankers and ships. A fine would be suitable for such behaviour from ships as they dont follow the rules.

Secondly, coming ashore, faces us the threat that comes from the daily use of vehicles. Car exhaust fumes are starting to become a threat to the environmen despite its bad reputation among all other countries. Obviously, Carbon monoxide and carbon dioxinde are the damaging monements in the exhaust fumes as they cause various kinds of diseases and , of course, damaging the ozon layer. Enforcing a law that make it a must for drivers to fit a filter on their exhaust would be helpful to protect the environment from being spoilt by the altra-violen rays that comes from the sun.

The unbalanced environmental status will eventually threat the human beeings unless the government take action against people and companies that break the law that protects the nature. Actually, companies are involved in this problem as well as people do. Industrial Companies are extremely asked to not ignore the law and dump their chemical waste in rivers, lakes and the sea. Moreover, people are also asked to not litter streets and try their best to make thier city look as if it is the cleanest city. Its not so difficult if they had enough courage by running special varied programmes to let people clean their country but having fun at the same time.


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