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| Question You have been asked to write a report for the World Information Organisation on the following topic:
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Answer Click on the underlined words or phrases for comments. The numbers in brackets offer suggestions. General feedback appears below the essay. |
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Name: Katja Schuengel
School: University of Wolverhampton This is a report hold on {1} the three greatest threats to the environment in Germany and some suggested solutions to the problems. The three most important threats to the environment in Germany {2} are recycling of waste, especially waste of households {3}, pollution in general and the abuse {4} of fertilisers, especially by farmers. Recycling of waste in households remains still a problem due to people's negligence towards collecting their waste. Old papers and sheets should be collected separately as well as rests of food, which can be stored in the garden, and plastic boxes, such as yoghurt pots, and empty bottles. {5} The population has to behave more sensible {6} and the government should demand to collect waste with commencing an environmental campaign. {7} Pollution in general, emphasising on pollution of surroundings {8}, is a problem in Germany too. A lot of people throw their waste, such as tissues, on the street - just where they are walking - instead of putting their rubbish in a bin. But a worse point is to leave their used stuff {9} in the forest or park when people are going for a walk. A solution of pollution prevention{10} is to provide more litter boxes. The last threat is the abuse{11} of fertilisers in farming because the population's health can be dangerously affected after having eaten the food. More and more farmers use fertilisers to augment their crop. The chemical ingredients of fertilisers are supposed to protect the harvest against insects, which reduce the crop. The population of Germany should protest against the abuse of fertilisers and boycott the farmer's food. The government has to support the croppers to use more biological methods.{12} |
| Feedback This report discusses three main threats to the environment and some proposals to solve these problems. In other words, the points made are entirely relevant to the question. The main language errors are to do with vocabulary choice, so I have made some alternative suggestions, which sound more natural. Fiona Joseph 24.10.00 P.S. Congratulations to Katja, who passed the CAE exam in June! |
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I have been asked to write a report about the serious threats to the
environment in my country. In fact, recent researches proved that there
are various types of monements that affects the environment in a negative
way, therefore something should be done to stop this problem from becoming
a real threat to the wild-life and the marine life. |
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