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You are reading your favourite newspaper and you come across a letter which attacks the education system in your country (or a country that you know well).
|... What a pity our school system is so out-of- date. I would suggest that some major educational reforms are needed in this new century!
Prof Collins To give YOUR view contact the editor by writing to...
Write a letter to the editor of the newspaper giving your response to Prof. Collins' letter (220-260 words)
Read Augusto's answer to this question below. Try correcting the piece of writing yourself first: use the marking codes to think about what might be wrong (or what's good) about the piece of work. Then when you're ready, click the green buttons in the text for our feedback.
Dear Prof Collins,
I am writing to express my agreement with the criticisms that you spread WW
As you suitably mentioned, in the new century, named for WW
Nevertheless, I have already realized that, as it is an ordinary concern in the population's opinion, drawing the politics WF
Regarding the reforms that you've suggested, I would say that not only the schools are WO
I would be grateful if you could look into my suggestion. In case of further comments, I am available for a conversation. PE
I look forward to hearing from you.
Yours faithfully WW
Augusto Yassuo Teoi
Augusto, this is a good attempt at quite a difficult task. The layout of your letter and the opening and closing phrases are good. Your style of writing is very fluent, although on occasions your phraseology is a bit awkward (e.g. 'recyling compulsory course' and 'should' substituted for 'would').
The reader would have a basic understanding of your views but at approximately 190 words you have plenty of scope to develop your arguments further. The word limit in the exam is about 260 at CAE level so you should aim to get as close to the target as you can.
/\ Word(s) missing
- Omit word
PE Poorly expressed
SS Sentence Structure
T Tip (Not wrong but a suggestion)
WF Wrong form
WO Word order
WT Wrong tense
WW Wrong word