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Writing
Paper: Part 2 Question
Write a letter to the editor of 'Future Net' giving your views (about 250 words). |
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Answer Click on the underlined words or phrases for comments. The numbers in brackets offer suggestions. General feedback appears below the essay. |
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Name: Anna Zagorna
School: V LO im. Kanclerza Jana Zamoyskiego w Dabrowie Gorniczej Dear Sir, The article says that according to the internet experts, books are dead and will soon become extinct. The predictions for 2020 that you stated are very alarming. Computers have become very common in recent years. Every month the number of people using {***}internet{2} is increasing. Despite this fact I do not think that printed books will be replaced with electronic ones. The biggest pro of electronic form of what we read{3} is that we can modify (copy, cut, paste, underline etc) the text whenever we want. Pages will never ever grow yellow. Buying electronic books on cd-rom or downloading from {***}internet is (in my country) cheaper (and easier, of course). They can consist of attractive pictures and multimedial {4} presentations. You can easily print {***}selected piece of {***}chapter or find a word you look {5} for. A funny pro I thought of is that your pet will never eat your reading matters.{6} However, after considering all these advantages, I am not even a little bit convinced to using {7} electronic books. Reading from {***}computer monitor tires your eyes very much and soon you can simply bore yourself {8} and lose heart. You can only read when there is a computer near {9}, never on the bus or train. What is more, a large amount{10} of people got used to {11} printed forms of books, {12} it is even said that they {13} have souls, can feel and miss when they have not been read for a long time. Although there are more advantages of{14} using electronic books, personally I will never give up using and reading printed versions. I partly agree with the writer of the article because one can never fully foresee what {***} {15} is going to be in 20 years. In my opinion, only if {***} prices of computers decrease and more and more people can afford using {16} the internet, only then we can start thinking that the printed form of book will become extinct. But we have nothing to worry about now{17}. Yours faithfully, Anna Zagorna |
| Feedback This letter is well-organised, Anna. You balance the arguments for and against e-books and the reader is left with a clear impression of your own point of view. This is good to do in the type of task where you are asked to give your opinion. You have a nice style of writing and you express your feelings well. There are some language errors (mainly missing articles, the odd preposition and verb tense) but this essay also demonstrates a good range of vocabulary. (I have highlighted the phrases I particularly liked!) The register is (mostly) consistently on the formal side, which is appropriate for the task. Good luck for the December exam. Best wishes Fiona Joseph 5.9.01 |
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