Check out students' answers to Flo-Joe's CAE Writing tasks with a teacher's feedback
You have recently read the following magazine article:
|Is it the end of the printed book as we know it?
According to internet experts, the book is dead. What they are predicting is that by 2020 90% of everything we read will be in electronic form. So the form of the book that has been around for 1300 years will become extinct...
Write a letter to the editor of 'Future Net' giving your views (220-260 words).
Read Elena's answer to this question below. Try correcting the piece of writing yourself first: use the marking codes to think about what might be wrong (or what's good) about the piece of work. Then when you're ready, click the green buttons in the text for our feedback.
I am writing with the reference to the article in the January edition of "Future Net", which predicts that in the foreseeable future electronic books will replace printed ones.Gd
The importance of printed books must not be overlooked, particularly when it comes to reading for pleasure. Book lovers like holding a nicely bound book, flipping pages, enjoying its touch and smell. Most readers like putting hardbacks on bookshelves and watch WF
I am a dedicated reader of your magazine and I hope you will take my views into account in the future editions of your magazine. Gd
Well done, Elena. This letter discusses very fully the pros and cons of traditional books versus e-books, and you weigh up the issues intelligently. If you were answering such a question in the CAE exam you would need to be careful not to write too much - this piece is nearly double the word limit of a CAE writing task! (Not only might you be penalised for overwriting, you might also lose valuable time that could have been spent on the second task.) You are obviously very well-informed about the topic and this makes your letter a pleasure to read. The letter is organised appropriately and written in a suitable register for the editor - i.e. warm and friendly, without being too formal or informal.
On the language side, you need review the rules for definite and indefinite articles. I am sympathetic because it's terribly difficult if your first language has no articles! On a positive note, your general (and technological vocabulary) is excellent and I have highlighted phrases and sentences that are particularly well put.
/\ Word(s) missing
- Omit word
PE Poorly expressed
SS Sentence Structure
T Tip (Not wrong but a suggestion)
WF Wrong form
WO Word order
WT Wrong tense
WW Wrong word