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Writing Paper: Part 2
Task type: A report

Question
You are a member of a committee that is campaigning for an international sports competition to be hosted in your home town. You have received the following memo:

  To: Committee members
From: Chairman

I would be grateful if all members could write a short report giving their views on the following points:

1. why our town would be a suitable host for the competition
2. any objections to our campaign and how we can overcome them
3. suggestions as to how we can make the best use of our budget

 

Write your report for the Chairman of the committee. (about 250 words)



Answer

Click on the underlined words or phrases for comments. The numbers in brackets offer suggestions. General feedback appears below the essay.

Name: Nardin Caterina

Dear Chairman,

I am writing with regard to the campaign that you are promoting in favour of an international sports competition that could be hosted in my town.

As a matter of fact Venice could be a very good candidate for hosting the marathon competition, which will last one day.{1}

Moreover Venice is one of the most beautiful cultural cities in Italy. The marathonets {2} coming before or staying after the competition can take the advantage of visiting the city, which offers a great deal of facilities.{3}

There are two separate communication networks in the city, that of the waterways and that of the narrow streets. Public water buses and private water taxis run 24 hours a day although less frequently at night. The main centre can be reached very easily. Despite {***} {4} the private service is very expensive it is efficient.

Four and five stars hotels are located in the main area, but smaller hotels and a youth hostel are also available to families.

Hotel receptions and travel agencies are always ready to help their guests with a wide range of information on the city's entertainments, exhibitions and so on.

Sightseeing and excursions with private local guides are available on request.

In addition to this there is a significant lack of evening entertainments in the city such as theatres, cinemas and night-clubs.

On the contrary participants will find a wide range of restaurants, trattorias and bars with a good selection of menus suggesting local food.Some of these restaurants can be quite expensive.

In conclusion I think there will be no obstacles and objections to host this sporting competition in my town which on the other hand is also a cultural event for many of the participants.

Yours faithfully


Feedback

This report has been very well written, Nardin, in terms of your grammar and vocabulary. However, you need to really focus on the fact that this is a report you are writing. In fact, the layout of your answer is like that of a letter but it reads more like a tourist information brochure!
Remember also that the task had three parts to it: you've addressed the first part (why Venice should host the competition) but haven't really dealt with the objections or how to spend the budget wisely. This would lose you marks in the exam, unfortunately. On the plus side your control of language is good - just make sure in the exam that you answer all parts of the question!

Best of luck for the CAE.

Fiona Joseph
14.2.01



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