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Writing Paper: Part 2
Task type: Discursive composition

Question
In your English class you have been discussing different ways of studying English. Your teacher has asked you to write a composition with the following title:

 

The advantages and disadvantages of learning English abroad compared to learning in your own country.

Write your composition for your teacher (around 120-180 words).



Name: Nahla Karrar

The advantages and disadvantages of learning English abroad compared to learning in your own country

Learning English is very important in studying, doing business, or even in visiting foreign countries.

Learning English abroad, especially in {***} {1} UK, has a great advantage as you have to speak the language all the time whether during classes or in daily activities such as shopping, asking for directions, and watching TV. It will certainly improve my{2} accent and make me used to think in English - not in my native language. Not anyone {3} can afford studying English abroad as it is very expensive. On the other hand{4}, some people cannot get along with a different culture and suffer homesick {5}.

Learning English in my own country has its pros and cons. Being with students speaking the same language and have {6} the same problems make {7} studying a {8} fun, and sometimes competition urge students to work harder. At the same time using the native language in class limit the ability of speaking English fluently{9}.

Taking in {10} consideration the high expenses of learning abroad, I prefer to study in my own country and make efforts to improve my English by making friendships with English native-speakers who live {***} {11}or visit my country.


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This is a really good answer to the question, Nahla. Your points are well made and the composition is splendidly organised into 4 clear paragraphs. Your control of language is generally very good also. Just be a little careful with 3rd person singular present tense endings and have a look at my -ing corrections to a couple of other verbs.
Well done!

Best wishes
Fiona Joseph
3.4.01


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