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Writing
Paper: Part 2 Question
Write your report to the manager of the club (around 120-180 words). |
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Answer Click on the underlined words or phrases for comments. The numbers in brackets offer suggestions. General feedback appears below the essay. |
Name: Ling
School: University of Essex, UK Introduction: The aim of this report is to summarize the best and worst aspects of the club. The report is based on the sample {1} of my family members who have using {2} the club's facilities. Best Aspects: The variety {3} facilities are convenient and cheap to use. The changing rooms of {***} swimming pool etc are very clean. The consummation of the café is inexpensive.{4} The gym's equipment are {5} good and completely {6}. The services of the staffs are fairly good. Worst Aspects: The facilities are not opened{7} on Saturday and Sunday evenings, which we think that it is really inconvenient. The badminton courts are not available. The only café is not enough using for the customers as there is no other restaurants. {8} Recommendations: To conclude, the facilities are well-organized but there are some suggestions of {9} us: Extend the opening hours on weekends evenings. Install badminton courts as more and more people take up the sport. Install some restaurants for the addition of {10}customers and some drinks machines may be necessary as well by the time of closures of the café or restaurants. {11} |
| Feedback This is a well-structured report, Ling, which covers all the necessary points. There are a number of occasions where your choice of expression isn't quite right so I have made a number of suggestions for you to study. This is a good attempt at the task, nevertheless! Good luck in your studies. Fiona Joseph 20.8.01 |
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