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Paper: Part 2 Question
Write the text for the leaflet. (220-260 words) |
Answer Click on the underlined words or phrases for comments. The numbers in brackets offer suggestions. General feedback appears below the essay. |
Name: Chiara Rabbiosi
School: The British Council - Milan, Italy essay: SURVIVAL KIT FOR NEW STUDENTS AT BRIXTON COLLEGE{1} Welcome everybody! As you are a "new-comer" here it's easy that you feel disoriented{2}. This leaflet is made {3} to help you, so please go through it immediately {4}. CLASSES AND LESSONS: each class is constituted by {5} about 20 students. Lessons last 50 minutes each, with a 10 min break between them. Lessons are Mon. to Fri. beginning at 8.20 am to 3pm with a lunch break from 12.20 to 1 pm. Please be punctual at {6} the lessons: not only will you show respect to the teacher and your classmates but also you will take more advantage {7} from the lesson. Any subject correspond a classroom {8} - you will have to move for any lesson to the appropriate room. This makes the room to be a real laboratory (e.g. of French) and the students are invited to stick on the walls anything concerning that subject. STUDY FACILITIES We have a furnished library and a computer laboratory. The library (Mon. to Fri. 8am - 5pm) is on the main floor next to the Director{9} Office (and surely you won't speak aloud!).{10} As you entered the college as a student, you are automatically a member. You can take as many as three books and have to return them in three weeks. Also keep an eye on the board at the entrance: you will find notice for student meetings or lectures. The computer lab. is at the 2nd foor (disabled {***} {11} have access at {12} the one in room 12 on the main floor). You can have access whenever you want to and it's free of charge, but if you want to be sure to find a place you can book it one day in advance.
I wish to enjoy the college {13} : college years are supposed to be the best ones!! Chiara Rabbiosi Student Representative Commitee |
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The layout and organisation (title, headings) of this leaflet are very good. It is also a nicely written essay that is packed full of good advice about how to help new students settle in. You are successful in achieving just the right tone - friendly, welcoming and not too formal. For the makeover, I have concentrated on rewriting some of your words and phrases to make them sound more natural to a native-speaker. Happy reading and good luck for the CAE! Fiona Joseph 20.11.00 |
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Dear new student, welcome to the English School! |
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