Check out students' answers to Flo-Joe's CAE Writing tasks with a teacher's feedback
You are reading your favourite newspaper and you come across a letter which attacks the education system in your country (or a country that you know well):
|...What a pity our school system is so out-of- date. I would suggest that some major educational reforms are needed in this new century!
To give YOUR view contact the editor by writing to...
Write a letter to the editor of the newspaper giving your response to Prof. Collins' letter (220-260 words)
Read Sabrina's answer to this question below. Try correcting the piece of writing yourself first: use the marking codes to think about what might be wrong (or what's good) about the piece of work. Then when you're ready, click the green buttons in the text for our feedback.
I am writing this letter in response to Prof Collins' letter, published on WW
As for the first point, it seems to me that the real problem is not the need for "better" teachers but, on the contrary, the need for a new way of teaching. In my opinion, what is really "out-of-date" is the traditional methodological approach, which is still too much linked to mnemonic and abstract learning and too little concerned about real social contest. WW
I wish to close my letter with a doubt which might require further reflections on this delicate subject. Gd
I really liked the way that you tackled this question. The organisation of the letter is appropriate and the register is suitably formal. You complete the task in full, with sound arguments in favour or against the professor's viewpoint.
Your language shows flair (e.g. 'this delicate subject') and you are not afraid to take risks with your choice of vocabulary. I have been a little 'picky' with some of your word choices, but this is because your level is very good and I know you will not mind! There are a couple of prepositions that are incorrectly used - this is a very tricky area even for advanced students - but all in all, this is a nice answer.
/\ Word(s) missing
- Omit word
PE Poorly expressed
SS Sentence Structure
T Tip (Not wrong but a suggestion)
WF Wrong form
WO Word order
WT Wrong tense
WW Wrong word